What makes it particularly effective is not just its cohesive structure and elegant style but also the level of details the author uses in the response.
By directly identifying the specific aspects of the university that are attractive to the writer, the writer is able to clearly and effectively show not only his commitment to his studies but – perhaps more importantly – the level of thought he put into his decision to apply.
At the Department of Electrical and Computer Engineering at State University, I will be able to do just that.
In a department where education and research are intermixed, I can continue to follow the path that towards scientific excellence.
Where others see the engineering, experimentation, and presentation of science as a chore, I only see excitement.
Even as a child I constantly sought it out, first on television with Bill Nye and The Mythbusters, then later in person in every museum exhibit I could find.
Science in all its forms fascinated me, but science projects in particular were a category all to themselves.
To me, science projects were a special joy that only grew with time.
I, like State University, constantly work to explore the limits of nature by exceeding expectations.
Long an amateur scientist, it was this drive that brought me to the University of Texas for its Student Science Training Program in 2013.