Every essay or assignment you write must begin with an introduction.
It might be helpful to think of the introduction as an inverted pyramid.
In the introduction above, the opening line does not serve to grab the reader’s attention.
Instead, it is a statement of an obvious and mundane fact. A more effective attention grabber may point out a specific, and perhaps surprising, instance when adults use math in their daily lives, in order to show the reader why this is such as important topic to consider.
In 2006, when Nancy Pelosi became the nation’s first female Speaker of the House, one woman’s voice rang out clearly.
With this development, democracy grew to its truest level ever in terms of women’s equality.
Next the writer “announces” her topic by stating, “The topic I have chosen to write about…” Although it is necessary to introduce your specific topic, you want to avoid making generic announcements that reference your assignment.
This technique is not as sophisticated and may distract the reader from your larger purpose for writing the essay.
Instead, you might try to make the reader see why this is such an important topic to discuss.
Finally, this sample introduction is lacking a clear thesis statement.